Cover Letter
Portfolio Committee
Mathematics Department
Fudan University
Mex Zhou 0518047
Dear Portfolio Reader:
To write in English is always Chinese student’s weakness and I’m not exceptional. After having studied English for over ten years, I found it dismay that it was still hard for me to write in a native way. For this, I prepared to improve my writing ability when I entered the Fudan University and, the advanced English writing course taught by Mr Corio was one of the process I adopted to achieve it.
Before the writing course, I had less experience of a long essay. The largest number of the words I had written in one passage before this course was only about 500. That was only half of this class’s requirment. It makes me feel challenged. As presented at this portfolio, the numbers of the words included in the three drafts increases one by one. Another challenge I faced while working my portfolio is vocabulary. Perhaps it is the common problem for all the foreign learners. Although we may have recited lots of words while working for TOFEL or GRE, only a little words will occur to us when it comes to writing. I tried to show the readers the awareness of these challenges and my improvement.
The Draft One is a simple one. Although it has formed a stronge thesis statements and covered most of the details needed, the structure is far from satisfaction. At the beginning of the essay, it declared the thesis of the essay that “Black humour was deliberately chosen to reflect the fact that no matter how hard the heroes might fight, even if keeping optimistic after so much pains, they could never get rid of that horrible life around them.” However, I failed to prove it with enough evidences, just making a brief analysis of the first, the middle and the last paragraph. All the essay only consists of about 700 words, which may be unable to support the idea. Besides, some words are not chosen carefully and grammatic error could be found somewhere.
We had a class discussion then. I exchanged my Draft One with my two partners and thanksfully, they offered me a few suggestion quite useful. Some more significant details were added to my essay which makes it seems more abundant. I have also modified the order of the paragraphs to enhance the logic. In this way, the essay becomes an acceptable one as I think. One will get my ideas clearly through his reading, and he will find enough subordinaions to prove my thesis. I still had trouble in some choices of the words. I supposed there are some improper expression in my essay I don’t know. I decided to check it out with my partners once more.
There are no big change at the Draft Three. I managed to replace a few words with more suitable ones. For example, to discuss about the rich family in a vivid way, I quote the phrase of “a spherical boy, an “ovoid” father and a cuboid mother,” and comment their life as abundant and easy. Besides, I revise some expressions and reorganize the sentences in several paragraphs to smooth it. I believe the readers will be clearly showed what I am going to talk about in my essay. The length of about 1000 words is enough to support my essay strongly and convey my thesis to the readers completely.
What’s more, my portfolio also include a reading log and final Timed-writing. Those are both part of this course’s content. As I had read four famous novels, I made sense of some writing styles. Of course, it is not enough and I plan to read more in the future. Timed-writing is another work necessary. Since it was finished during 30 minutes in class, some mistakes cannot be avoided. I added it on the portfolio as well.
Efforts were made during my study at Mr Corio’s advanced writing class. I have learned to write an essay much longer than before and get used to express my idea in a quite formal way. Besides, the reading work of some interesting well-known stories gives me a general view of the foreign masterpieces. Now I am quite confident to organize my writing and the portfolio as well. All these things are meaningful and helpful to me, while I still need to keep on my practising and reading process, which will enable me to write naturally in English at last. The learning of a language has no end, especially when it concerns to the writing. I am looking forward to exchanging our ideas with the readers here and to enhancing our writing ability altogether.
Sincerely
Mathematics Department
Fudan University
Mex Zhou 0518047
Dear Portfolio Reader:
To write in English is always Chinese student’s weakness and I’m not exceptional. After having studied English for over ten years, I found it dismay that it was still hard for me to write in a native way. For this, I prepared to improve my writing ability when I entered the Fudan University and, the advanced English writing course taught by Mr Corio was one of the process I adopted to achieve it.
Before the writing course, I had less experience of a long essay. The largest number of the words I had written in one passage before this course was only about 500. That was only half of this class’s requirment. It makes me feel challenged. As presented at this portfolio, the numbers of the words included in the three drafts increases one by one. Another challenge I faced while working my portfolio is vocabulary. Perhaps it is the common problem for all the foreign learners. Although we may have recited lots of words while working for TOFEL or GRE, only a little words will occur to us when it comes to writing. I tried to show the readers the awareness of these challenges and my improvement.
The Draft One is a simple one. Although it has formed a stronge thesis statements and covered most of the details needed, the structure is far from satisfaction. At the beginning of the essay, it declared the thesis of the essay that “Black humour was deliberately chosen to reflect the fact that no matter how hard the heroes might fight, even if keeping optimistic after so much pains, they could never get rid of that horrible life around them.” However, I failed to prove it with enough evidences, just making a brief analysis of the first, the middle and the last paragraph. All the essay only consists of about 700 words, which may be unable to support the idea. Besides, some words are not chosen carefully and grammatic error could be found somewhere.
We had a class discussion then. I exchanged my Draft One with my two partners and thanksfully, they offered me a few suggestion quite useful. Some more significant details were added to my essay which makes it seems more abundant. I have also modified the order of the paragraphs to enhance the logic. In this way, the essay becomes an acceptable one as I think. One will get my ideas clearly through his reading, and he will find enough subordinaions to prove my thesis. I still had trouble in some choices of the words. I supposed there are some improper expression in my essay I don’t know. I decided to check it out with my partners once more.
There are no big change at the Draft Three. I managed to replace a few words with more suitable ones. For example, to discuss about the rich family in a vivid way, I quote the phrase of “a spherical boy, an “ovoid” father and a cuboid mother,” and comment their life as abundant and easy. Besides, I revise some expressions and reorganize the sentences in several paragraphs to smooth it. I believe the readers will be clearly showed what I am going to talk about in my essay. The length of about 1000 words is enough to support my essay strongly and convey my thesis to the readers completely.
What’s more, my portfolio also include a reading log and final Timed-writing. Those are both part of this course’s content. As I had read four famous novels, I made sense of some writing styles. Of course, it is not enough and I plan to read more in the future. Timed-writing is another work necessary. Since it was finished during 30 minutes in class, some mistakes cannot be avoided. I added it on the portfolio as well.
Efforts were made during my study at Mr Corio’s advanced writing class. I have learned to write an essay much longer than before and get used to express my idea in a quite formal way. Besides, the reading work of some interesting well-known stories gives me a general view of the foreign masterpieces. Now I am quite confident to organize my writing and the portfolio as well. All these things are meaningful and helpful to me, while I still need to keep on my practising and reading process, which will enable me to write naturally in English at last. The learning of a language has no end, especially when it concerns to the writing. I am looking forward to exchanging our ideas with the readers here and to enhancing our writing ability altogether.
Sincerely
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